The scorching wind swept needles of sand over her as she stood in the doorway of the diner. Swiftly she made another selfie and posted it on her blog, “Celebrity Diner” posing exactly like Kim did on page 5. She turned to peak in through the screendoor. The regualars were still eating; soon they would want their coffee, these grey, ordinary, uninteresting people. Kim would never bear being surrounded by avarage like this and neither will she. The pot of coffee was now prepared for them. Today the refills were on the house. Tomorrow is a new life. For her.
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Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
11/8/2014 04:29:52 am
Dear Veronika,
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Veronika Borzymowski
11/8/2014 03:44:22 pm
Dear Rochelle, thanks for this, to pick up the typo! As for the sentence with Kim, since Kim is not present I felt it had to be would.,If Kim would be there she would not stand for it. I am sure she could stand for it, just wouldn't. As for the last sentence with the new life, I wanted to point out that this was something that was happening, hence the present tense in tomorrow is a new day to underline a certain break. All the other stuff in the story had been imaginations and preparations but the new life was a fact.
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Rida
11/9/2014 03:56:01 pm
lots of great imagery here. i could feel her desperation for wanting more out of life...
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